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[Toll of the Lost 1]

That was really cool!!

I have to say, and I've seen that you have recognised this in other review, that the animation it's the episode's weakest point, and I would probably also say that the character designs could use some work. There are some moments that are very well done, considering all.
Regardless of that, I found it really engaging and fun to watch. Like others said, music, voices and script are all great, and I think the animation is good enough to not bring it down.
I wouldn't do the next episodes too much longer than what it is already without improving animation or design on some way, as it could make it tedious. Is much better to have an audience committed to shorter episodes than losing their attention with longer ones.
Also is a good idea to shorten the intro in the next episodes. Tales of Alethrion has a really long intro and I founded it very annoying.

In all, there are professional products that are not as entertaining as this is, so you are doing great!
Congratulations!!

Xiphon responds:

Believe it or not, there's actually a 2 minute version of that opening that I want to release independently on its own, but the episode versions do need to be shorter. This one was 1:30ish, in the future we have a version that's something around 45 seconds.

As far as episode length, it's definitely a balancing act. I think this episode was actually a little too short, after reading reviews and analyzing where this leaves the audience and myself as far as questions that have gone unanswered. Things I intended to be mysteries for people to theorize on that I could later answer, to a few people feel like plotholes. I'm sort of left in a position where there's story aspects I'd love to discuss but it'll be hard in the future to do so while still moving forward with the rest of the plot, and I think that may be an argument for this episode needing to have maybe 10% more focus on the world building, rather than a very strict 'pointA to pointB' rush to the result. If things DO get longer, it won't be by much, I'd say maybe to a max of 12-15 minutes (not counting credits, etc) just to give it some breathing room.

All that said, I ought to do a vlog on all this cause I find the science behind the writing process fascinating. The amount of trial and error in this series is really interesting.

[Intern Robot Doctor]

Yeeeeaaah, why not?
Really liked everything from it, although I have to say the thumbnail kinda ruins the off-screen shot where the blood spills over the family picture. I would definitely change that thumbnail as I've noticed that people is really likely to stop watching a video if they know what's about to happen (even if they really don't know the punchline... kids these days).

jessejayjones responds:

Fair point! Already made the change. Thanks man! :)

[Shieldmaiden Part One]

Awesome! Best of lucks with your patreon! I would collaborate if I could.

PiratePudding responds:

Thank you! I hope it will work out. :)

[How To Move On]

Haha, very nice! But I must say I almost quited at the beggining with those chessy cheating jokes. The ending saved it.

itsalexclark responds:

a joke is a joke - as long as there are more good ones than bad ones it's a win! :) thanks for watching and commenting .